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Stooped and haunted, the gentle man at rest
sleeps soundly, undisturbed, in Sunday best,
asleep ensconced in brittle timeless fire,
and seeking tryst with all of Man's desire.
This poet's words not pure enough to soothe,
nor sharply tainted, cause enough to bruise
the sleeping ego, neat and trim, inside
disrupted harmony - a vulture's pride.
The closed and hidden eye has seen it all,
and shouldered all necessity; to call
it living is to leave it all undone -
the vicious twist of life's true form has won.
sleeps soundly, undisturbed, in Sunday best,
asleep ensconced in brittle timeless fire,
and seeking tryst with all of Man's desire.
This poet's words not pure enough to soothe,
nor sharply tainted, cause enough to bruise
the sleeping ego, neat and trim, inside
disrupted harmony - a vulture's pride.
The closed and hidden eye has seen it all,
and shouldered all necessity; to call
it living is to leave it all undone -
the vicious twist of life's true form has won.
Since I began reading *Aladdin-Sane's wonderful writing, I have found myself playing around with quite a bit of rhyming poetry. That, for me, is unusual as I don't tend to get on too well with it, however this piece - the product of only a short space of time spent thinking and writing, even more unusual for me - this piece interests me because I don't find the rhyme at all forced.
Please do let me know if I have evaluated this wrongly, as I would love to be able to incorporate rhyme schemes into more of my future work now I believe I have a handle on how to achieve usable results from it.
Please do let me know if I have evaluated this wrongly, as I would love to be able to incorporate rhyme schemes into more of my future work now I believe I have a handle on how to achieve usable results from it.
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this is by far the absolutely and completely the single most beautiful poem i have ever had the glory of reading in my entire life! absolutely amazing, powerful and touching! 