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Awake Under the Blankets by *jahg:iconjahg:





Closer to darkness than anticipated,
the shadows breach the wall and slip
across the carpet.

With childish certainty the danger slides
and toils and bristles with thorns and eyes,
and eyes peer out from under sheets.

Magic never stood the test of time,
but clutching teddy close
prevents a mind spilling into tears.

Evil stalks on spindle legs
grown knobby and buckled through age,
the weight of slushy ooze a challenge.

Ears pick out the smacking of lips,
a meal made of child on the menu,
the slither of entrails never tucked in.

Move and be found, the little boy lost
inside the mind of an adult left to think,
quake with unease, but barely breath in truth.

While eager tentacles fumble with claws
made scratchy through crushing babies bones,
a pulse throbs under the blankets.

Catch the glow beneath sleeping cloth,
the torch bulb switched to combat fear,
and see the throwing off of covers.

The monster reels, flailing parts unknown,
descending the stair that waits in silence
at the back of the wardrobe.

A morning bird weaves tapestries in light,
and shadows best left forgotten await
another closing night.
©2005-2009 *jahg
:iconjahg:

Author's Comments

Preface to my upcoming competition regarding Fear of the Dark, I give you this piece. For some people fear of the dark is exactly that, the darkness contains something which frightens them. For others fear of the dark is more complicated, the darkness signifies communication, or the gaps between one person speaking and the next.

This piece offers a reminder that it's inaction that causes fear. That danger lurks ready to accept our failures, not to create them for us.

Daily Deviation

Given 2005-02-22

Awake Under the Blankets by *jahg reminds us all of the times we have spent huddled in fear beneath our blankets as if that flimsy material was a shield of titanium strength. (Suggested by ~purplescales and Featured by `ndifference)

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:iconthatguyonthestreet:
For some reason, this was undeniably cute.

I loved the simplicity, and the imagery...'twas beautiful.

The personification was refreshing and almost comical.

:)

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I'm so goth, I have a fishnet umbrella.

Still will put pink wig in front of wang and take photo for sex.
:iconthatguyonthestreet:
I expected that to be followed by a swift punch in the arm, but since this was not so, I rejoice!

;)

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I'm so goth, I have a fishnet umbrella.

Still will put pink wig in front of wang and take photo for sex.
:iconjahg:
Och, no! - I'm not a violent one, unless someone borrows my teddy bear without asking first. Then I get the stabbing forks out, obviously.
:iconthatguyonthestreet:
Oh, of course.

Completely admirable and understandable.

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I'm so goth, I have a fishnet umbrella.

Still will put pink wig in front of wang and take photo for sex.
:icondragonsneeze:
I think so too! Cute little kid with a big imagination. Just like me!

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-The kids....They call me Mr. Glass....
:iconjahg:
:lol: You are silly, end of sentence.

[checks wardrobe for the Bogey Man, and takes a box of man-size tissues to sponge his nose]
:iconstreethawk:
I don't really know much about poetry but coz it's you i'll do whatever i can.
for me it's a great poetry piece. the simplicity gives it a warm feeling.

good job dude.

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Make your own story, I have mine.
:icondragonsneeze:
Better look close... I hear he's been practicing to be a SWAT member...

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-The kids....They call me Mr. Glass....
:iconjahg:
Oh, my. :o I'll just strap on this body armour first, I think.

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